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Felt that this paragraph was weak.
Take a look.
She is in the ocean swimming.
Daze is her boyfriend.
- >
I absolutely loved how the brilliant sunlight touched my skin through the sparkling, alit water. Excitedly, I decided to flip over onto my back, without a sudden feeling of doubt or consciousness. I enjoyed the sudden rush of so many different feelings I felt. Fusions of crazed adrenaline and adventurous excitement fumed through my body.
The long, shining hair of mine whooshed over my face, and I smiled delightedly from the impact.
Suddenly, Daze’s smooth buttery hands found mine. I then closed my eyes and rested again, surrounded in comfort and serenity. He ran his fingers over my soft lips and suddenly tapped my shoulder gently. I opened my eyes, and saw his smiling, joyous face hovering above mine. Slowly, he slid his arm around my waist and spun me around gently underwater in circular motions. I floated like an angel lying on a puffy, beautiful cloud.
Felt that this paragraph was weak.
Take a look.
She is in the ocean swimming.
Daze is her boyfriend.
- >
I absolutely loved how the brilliant sunlight touched my skin through the sparkling, alit water. Excitedly, I decided to flip over onto my back, without a sudden feeling of doubt or consciousness. I enjoyed the sudden rush of so many different feelings I felt. Fusions of crazed adrenaline and adventurous excitement fumed through my body.
The long, shining hair of mine whooshed over my face, and I smiled delightedly from the impact.
Suddenly, Daze’s smooth buttery hands found mine. I then closed my eyes and rested again, surrounded in comfort and serenity. He ran his fingers over my soft lips and suddenly tapped my shoulder gently. I opened my eyes, and saw his smiling, joyous face hovering above mine. Slowly, he slid his arm around my waist and spun me around gently underwater in circular motions. I floated like an angel lying on a puffy, beautiful cloud.