This is a sonnet i wrote in 7th grade. I would appreciate and advice and editing tips to improve my writing. Thank you
Sam Cherfas
Period 3
Carrey
“Heartbreak and Hope “
Here I lay, a single unwanted leaf
Haste fully seeking love that can’t be sought.
No longer to find love, I mourn with grief.
And without much hope I forget the thought
Then the moments of heartbreak fill my mind
My heart pounds faster as if it will rot
Unable to see bright sides as if I’m blind.
Thoughts flying swiftly but only to clot
Though sometimes I wish to leap to high stars
Only to subdue my daily great troubles
As Emotions run through my deepened scars
Later released like little small bubbles
But now I see that all love is not lost
Someday my lonely cold heart will defrost
Sam Cherfas
Period 3
Carrey
“Heartbreak and Hope “
Here I lay, a single unwanted leaf
Haste fully seeking love that can’t be sought.
No longer to find love, I mourn with grief.
And without much hope I forget the thought
Then the moments of heartbreak fill my mind
My heart pounds faster as if it will rot
Unable to see bright sides as if I’m blind.
Thoughts flying swiftly but only to clot
Though sometimes I wish to leap to high stars
Only to subdue my daily great troubles
As Emotions run through my deepened scars
Later released like little small bubbles
But now I see that all love is not lost
Someday my lonely cold heart will defrost