How do you like this poem I wrote?

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We have black oil, on black sand
Green colors like green crayons
Have the yellow sun spinning us around
Like an orange, orange, and orange corn
Growing red beans and red rice
Blue pigs with red and blue lights
Under blue clouds over a beautiful sight
I'm in a blue tree, wearing a blue coat
Blue ink for writing a blue note
Blue hope, and blue dreams
Red white and blue flags over blue grass and swing
With blue mood swings, and blue blood streams
Reading blue writing while singing the blues
Then I fall off the side and I hang by a noose
Now my face is blue, my neck is too
Then I close my blue eyes and I imagine you
 
um it's a bit weird. it was okay until the end which was disturbing. not that good all in all i'd say.
 
I liked it, you have talent and the ending was great, and the colours you described painted pictures in my mind. I know this great website where you can put poems and short stories on it, its http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/ - its for young adults 13-25 years olds and your work is reviewed by them - its awesome! you can put as many stories and poems as you like on them and chat to people. if your interested just go to the link and register, its easy and if you want you can add me as a friend, im xGraceex on the member list. great poem :)
 
I liked it, you have talent and the ending was great, and the colours you described painted pictures in my mind. I know this great website where you can put poems and short stories on it, its http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/ - its for young adults 13-25 years olds and your work is reviewed by them - its awesome! you can put as many stories and poems as you like on them and chat to people. if your interested just go to the link and register, its easy and if you want you can add me as a friend, im xGraceex on the member list. great poem :)
 
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