How do you like my poem, "Adonai, here's love by rain"?

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preston m

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Oh Adonai, be exalted by my love coming in the heavens as rain,
With so many drops upon you, my Lord, how could it be said
That my heart is vain.
Accordingly, the sheep raises not an umbrella so that my
Affection, my devotion, my admiration for You gets
Everything in the heavens and on the earth wet,
Wherefore, only the goats scream out, "Is he done yet!"
For the beauty of Your everlasting reign express my
Attraction to You symbolic to rain,
Oh Adonai, my heart belongs to You, as well as, the
Conscious thoughts in my brain.

I love you, my God.
Strengthen me!
 
Beautiful.

If the grounds for my judgement are on religious pedagogical terms it is a divine beauty.
If the grounds for my judgement are for solely literary and linguistic aptitude - it is poetically a diamond
 
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