Caitlin Murphy
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OK so I started writing this short story, about this girl. The antique girl she is talking to is a phantom of some sort, but I don't know what I want to happen next. I know I want one of the phantoms to manifest and become friends with her, but then what? How do they meet? Details, characters names, etc. would be very much appreciated! Here's what I have so far, please comment!
“Why don’t you join us?” she whispered with her eyes glued to the ground. She was wearing an old dress with lace frills on it, and the overall effect made her look very…antique.
I felt the blood begin to rush to my face. “Wha…?” I began.
“What’s the point? Why do you live, why not just…” She let the sentence trail off, and I noted that now she was looking at me. “You could become happy with us, with everything you could ever want.”
“Then why do you come here? Why don’t you just leave me alone if you have all you could want?” I asked. I could feel the tears beginning to form in my eyes now.
“Because you’re the one thing we don’t have, Alessandra, company.” It sounded so matter-of-fact, so logical. But it was anything but.
“Why me? Why now of all times?” I heard my own voice, sounding ragged and exhausted in my ears. “Why am I so damned important?”
“Make no mistake, you can come willingly or not. We will find you and turn you into one of us…whether it be sooner or later.” She had evaded the question. Again.
The tears in my eyes finally ran down my red cheeks, along with the fear this stranger always evoked in me.
“Just leave me ALONE!” I yelled at her, but before she could reply, I woke up.
Chapter 1
I was in my bed, the same one I’d had since the sixth grade when I’d accidentally spilled a bottle of blue nail polish on the sheets. In the room I’d lived in since I was five years old. In the house my mom had bought after we lived in an apartment for a month while they finished it. Home.
Not with a creepy stranger in a dream that now felt eons away.
“Why don’t you join us?” she whispered with her eyes glued to the ground. She was wearing an old dress with lace frills on it, and the overall effect made her look very…antique.
I felt the blood begin to rush to my face. “Wha…?” I began.
“What’s the point? Why do you live, why not just…” She let the sentence trail off, and I noted that now she was looking at me. “You could become happy with us, with everything you could ever want.”
“Then why do you come here? Why don’t you just leave me alone if you have all you could want?” I asked. I could feel the tears beginning to form in my eyes now.
“Because you’re the one thing we don’t have, Alessandra, company.” It sounded so matter-of-fact, so logical. But it was anything but.
“Why me? Why now of all times?” I heard my own voice, sounding ragged and exhausted in my ears. “Why am I so damned important?”
“Make no mistake, you can come willingly or not. We will find you and turn you into one of us…whether it be sooner or later.” She had evaded the question. Again.
The tears in my eyes finally ran down my red cheeks, along with the fear this stranger always evoked in me.
“Just leave me ALONE!” I yelled at her, but before she could reply, I woke up.
Chapter 1
I was in my bed, the same one I’d had since the sixth grade when I’d accidentally spilled a bottle of blue nail polish on the sheets. In the room I’d lived in since I was five years old. In the house my mom had bought after we lived in an apartment for a month while they finished it. Home.
Not with a creepy stranger in a dream that now felt eons away.