Okay, so I've been getting into poetry. My friend says I should get my poems published, or show them to a professional. I don't think it's that good, but I don't know. One is about God, no remarks about other religions, it's not too deep, but some might not want to read it. What do you think? Should I improve?:
When You Love Someone....
No matter what,
No matter who,
When you love someone,
Make sure you say "I love you",
If you don't,
It'll be too late,
And all that love,
Will turn into hate,
When you love someone,
Take a chance.?
Big Fight.
What happened?
Something is not right
We were close
Now we're in a big fight
I love you
And we should turn a wrong
Into a right
Now it's like a war
When we talk, it's such a bore
It is a war,
It is a war
So Little, So Much
So much hate,
So little love,
So many things,
Needed from above
So much poor,
So little rich,
Someone might even,
Live in a ditch,
No matter where I am,
How well I am,,
Or how poor I am,
I just want you to know,
I love you.?
When You are Feeling Down
When you are feeling down
Your smile turns into a frown
All you want to do is cry
You sit there and ask yourself "Why?"
All you want is a friend
To stay and hold your hand
It feels like your heart has dropped
Or that your life is about to be stopped
Nothing hurts so bad
How could anyone be this sad?
I do anything I can and try
But all I can do is cry
How can someone be so cruel
And use me as a tool
I was so glad to have you
But since your gone, I don't know what to do
I MISS YOU!
OLD FRIENDSHIP
You said you'd never let me down
Yet your the one to make me frown
Never thought we'd go through this
But you are the one I miss
We thought we'd be friends forever
But now it's like we were never
Never thought it'd hurt this much
But now, our eyes never touch
Don't know who you are anymore
What is all this hating for?
Just give me one more try
You gave up on me but I don't know why
Y'all blamed EVERYTHING on me
I have feelings, can't you see?
You make my life so bad
I thought you were the best I ever had
I can't even think
In my tears, I will sink
I think you really care
Because I catch you in your stare
I hope this'll work in the end
Because you used to be my best friend
Now it's like we never were
And our friendship is a blur.
God
Nothing could ever change my beliefs
I talk to you for all of my griefs
I try my hardest to always pray
I will talk to you every day
You will always be by my side
And love for me is what you provide
I am no longer scared of death
Because I know you're to control my last breath
I depend on you the most
Life's a party, and your the host
I don't know why you put me here
But I will know why one year
There's always something to go wrong
But every day lived for you is like a song
Bad things have been in my past
But your love for me will always last
God, your the best to ever be
But it's even better knowing your with me
You've forgiven me for my lies
And you always hear my cries
Many people may decieve
But I can say I do believe
SADNESS
Nothing could ever stop
The things that make my heart drop
The hands on the clock keep on spinning
But there's never time for a new beginning
You have clearly broken my heart
Thought we'd be forever, never do we part
Always thinking of yourself
Treating me like a dusty book on a shelf
Nothing could ever make me happy
Because you always make me feel crappy
Saying I'm bad for other people
Yet, I live in a house with a steeple
You always decieve me
Yet there's anyone else I'd rather be
My life is such a lie
All I ever do is cry
You broke my heart
And now, we will always be apart. </3
Lonely In This World
When everyone is walking away
There's nothing left to say
You are standing there alone
And there's nothing to do but moan
I never knew what my life would be
And now there's nothing left to see
The world is filled with lies
Yet nobody is there to hear my cries
I help others with their griefs
Yet, I can't find my own reliefs
People turn their heads towards me
But there's nothing good to see
All this pain is never ending
I just wish for a new beginning
There once was someone standing by my side
But now my empty feeling is worldwide
No person will ever know
The feeling of hatred my life will show
GOOD DAY!
On a bright, peaceful day
There's no trouble in the way
Everything good will occur
And everything bad will be a blur
All the things I don't adore
I hope they won't be a bore.
WHAT DID YOU THINK OF THEM? ARE THEY GOOD? ARE THEY BAD? AND SUGGESTIONS? THANK YOU FOR READING THEM!
When You Love Someone....
No matter what,
No matter who,
When you love someone,
Make sure you say "I love you",
If you don't,
It'll be too late,
And all that love,
Will turn into hate,
When you love someone,
Take a chance.?
Big Fight.
What happened?
Something is not right
We were close
Now we're in a big fight
I love you
And we should turn a wrong
Into a right
Now it's like a war
When we talk, it's such a bore
It is a war,
It is a war
So Little, So Much
So much hate,
So little love,
So many things,
Needed from above
So much poor,
So little rich,
Someone might even,
Live in a ditch,
No matter where I am,
How well I am,,
Or how poor I am,
I just want you to know,
I love you.?
When You are Feeling Down
When you are feeling down
Your smile turns into a frown
All you want to do is cry
You sit there and ask yourself "Why?"
All you want is a friend
To stay and hold your hand
It feels like your heart has dropped
Or that your life is about to be stopped
Nothing hurts so bad
How could anyone be this sad?
I do anything I can and try
But all I can do is cry
How can someone be so cruel
And use me as a tool
I was so glad to have you
But since your gone, I don't know what to do
I MISS YOU!
OLD FRIENDSHIP
You said you'd never let me down
Yet your the one to make me frown
Never thought we'd go through this
But you are the one I miss
We thought we'd be friends forever
But now it's like we were never
Never thought it'd hurt this much
But now, our eyes never touch
Don't know who you are anymore
What is all this hating for?
Just give me one more try
You gave up on me but I don't know why
Y'all blamed EVERYTHING on me
I have feelings, can't you see?
You make my life so bad
I thought you were the best I ever had
I can't even think
In my tears, I will sink
I think you really care
Because I catch you in your stare
I hope this'll work in the end
Because you used to be my best friend
Now it's like we never were
And our friendship is a blur.
God
Nothing could ever change my beliefs
I talk to you for all of my griefs
I try my hardest to always pray
I will talk to you every day
You will always be by my side
And love for me is what you provide
I am no longer scared of death
Because I know you're to control my last breath
I depend on you the most
Life's a party, and your the host
I don't know why you put me here
But I will know why one year
There's always something to go wrong
But every day lived for you is like a song
Bad things have been in my past
But your love for me will always last
God, your the best to ever be
But it's even better knowing your with me
You've forgiven me for my lies
And you always hear my cries
Many people may decieve
But I can say I do believe
SADNESS
Nothing could ever stop
The things that make my heart drop
The hands on the clock keep on spinning
But there's never time for a new beginning
You have clearly broken my heart
Thought we'd be forever, never do we part
Always thinking of yourself
Treating me like a dusty book on a shelf
Nothing could ever make me happy
Because you always make me feel crappy
Saying I'm bad for other people
Yet, I live in a house with a steeple
You always decieve me
Yet there's anyone else I'd rather be
My life is such a lie
All I ever do is cry
You broke my heart
And now, we will always be apart. </3
Lonely In This World
When everyone is walking away
There's nothing left to say
You are standing there alone
And there's nothing to do but moan
I never knew what my life would be
And now there's nothing left to see
The world is filled with lies
Yet nobody is there to hear my cries
I help others with their griefs
Yet, I can't find my own reliefs
People turn their heads towards me
But there's nothing good to see
All this pain is never ending
I just wish for a new beginning
There once was someone standing by my side
But now my empty feeling is worldwide
No person will ever know
The feeling of hatred my life will show
GOOD DAY!
On a bright, peaceful day
There's no trouble in the way
Everything good will occur
And everything bad will be a blur
All the things I don't adore
I hope they won't be a bore.
WHAT DID YOU THINK OF THEM? ARE THEY GOOD? ARE THEY BAD? AND SUGGESTIONS? THANK YOU FOR READING THEM!