Hey guys I did these poems the other day and I was wondering how are they?

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happy guy.

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By your smooth skin i declare my war
My feelings are bound to yours
know my heart
It will always tremble
Oh please don't leave me to spindle
Get me off the plane,because my feeling are to deep for you,let me grow let me die don't force me to make you die.
Just get me out before I'm enslaved
your passion is to crude to be maimed.
Oh finally
I'm away for now
But why is insanity haunting me down?



Darkness is creeping back from the door.
Nature is calling me to go kill some more!
My mind is going my heart is beating.
Faster and faster until my love for you is nothing but bleeding.
Put me down and lay me to rest for my sorrow will be connected to the rest.
 
Im gonna put that second one on my myspace if you dont mind..

All credit goes to you.

Ill put By:username(yahooanswers)

If thats okay with you :DD
 
They were both really good. But, I liked the second one more :) . Because, I dont really get the first one. Is there a message in there? Because, I dont really see it. Apart from that BRILLIANT poe,s :D
Keep writing!
 
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