Hey can someone revise this sentence of my poem?

Breska H

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its for one of those -I AM- poems
anyways supposedly the first sentence is too weak for an opening..do you guys have any suggestions on how to make it better...


I am a shy girl who speaks only when the time is right.
I wonder what makes a novel truly great.
I hear the incessant voice of my conscience whisper at my ear.
I see the single blade of grass that remains still in the summer breeze.
I want to travel back in time to relive that special night.
I am a shy girl who speaks only when the time is right.
 
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