Haiku

this is pretty cool. sort of reminRAB me of the best haiku i've ever read:

The only problem
with haiku is that you just
get started and then

— Roger McGough
 
it has nothing to do with not liking you, if anyone had written your version i would have said the same thing

and no, the 'and then' is definitely fundamental. it's the whole point of his idea

though i just saw the edits that you made to yours and that changes it a bit, the commas imply the 'and then' somewhat. though my point still stanRAB.

and his isn't written in poor english

and i dont expect you to ever believe me when i say yours isnt better but you can believe what you want because i dont really care
 
it's meant to be blunt, that's the whole point of him not having enough room to continue the poem and having to end it abruptly

still dont see how it's poor english, there's nothing grammatically incorrect with it
 
it still makes complete sense though, because doing something with haiku causes you to do something frustrating

but i do get what you mean now, it doesn't exactly follow on correctly/logically. but i like that about the poem anyway.



being mechanically correct doesn't make it better. it certainly is more subtle, but i like the abruptness of his.
 
well there's not much you can do about it, but luckily there is an infinite amount of things you can do short, simple, poignant poems about so it's not so bad

plus you can 'plagiarise' the same idea as long as you express it slightly differently. the one you did above wouldnt count though because you've done it almost the same with just slight modifications
 
why the fuck does it matter if its grammatically correct or not dont you know anything about poetry or literature? its an expressive form of the language, its not supposed to be hampered in its expression by mechanics.

plus the english language in its proper form is almost unbearable.

In response to an English newspaper criticizing Winston Churchill for ending a sentence with a preposition in one of his speeches: "Such impudence, up with which I will not put."
 
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