Give some input on this short story I wrote?

ladyraven

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Living Target

The skeleton swayed slowly as the wind caressed it like a long lost lover once caressed it, touching it with gentle fingers. It had hung for so long that no flesh was visible. It was probably eaten by the vultures, I had noticed, who leered at it from the bough of another dead tree nearby.

Their eyes shifted to me, watching me intently. No doubt becoming excited about the prospect of a meal they haven’t had in a long time. A living target was more desirable than bones. A shiver coursed through me as visions of the corpse’s last moments flashed before my eyes. It was not an experience I would care to live.

I walked slowly on padded feet towards my car. I feared the slightest movement or noise would be all it would take for the hungry vultures to attack.

As I reached my car, I unlocked the door as quietly as I could, sat down on the seat, and then shut the door quickly behind me. Safe at last! Now I just hope my car would start and not desert me in my hour of need. I turned the key and it started immediately.

I was startled by the wail of a country song that blared out suddenly on the radio. I never did like those nasally sung country songs. It always reminded me of someone who was having an asthma attack and could not breathe. I turned the volume down and found a more relaxing station to help me regain my composure. As I put my car in gear, I let out a sigh of relief.

As I drove down the narrow road I looked out of the rear view mirror. The corpse waved in the wind and the vultures slowly disappeared into the night.
 
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