cinnamoroll_89
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I wrote this about Piri Thomas.
I am probably only a beginner at writing poetry and find it difficult to see the lines
of poetry and not poetry. I had to be first person of Piri Thomas, and write his life
getting it from the biography novel we read...
I read his book Down These Mean Streets.
Hopefully this poem conveys it enough...
Chocolate eyes,the brownest of skin
The white of Mami and siblings protected them
Shame filled excuses given for those who needed
I am not black but Puerto Rican! I say
Father always went away
But came back to look upon siblings with joy
I wonder if he loved me as much
Hateful words and uneasy glances
Directed at me
I was just a kid
My heart could not take it
The rough touch of resentment and hatred seized me
My eyes were open yet blind
Overwhelming shame and anger
A blurred line between them and myself
A division of races
I'll show them, I have heart!
With my fist and my gun
Let's see who gets respect now
It lessens the pain when I'm with my gang
Only the fight brings us closer
The drug makes us forget together
Always I needed the money but no respectable job
I pushed crack on the streets
The white powder was my best friend
Numbing the sorrow and guilt that plagued me
Addiction had its way of making a home
I wasted in the smoke of the lost
When I look in the mirror
It hurt me to see I was unrecognizable
Blood shot eyes,chapped cracked lips
Craters claimed my arms
I didn't listen to anyone
My gang listened to ME
But who am I?
Bang, goes the gun
Screams, Sirens, Scrambling,Crying
I need the money I know I am not forgiven
I shot a cop and was charged with first degree burglary
Please I don't want to die
The cold metal bars held my insanity
I am not the person they think I am
Years could only pass to finally learn
Behind dark lights I had found God
I had found pure integrity and self control
No more fights, and no more white powder
It was real
What I was missing now I had found
The hole slowly filled
Control
I now saw my reflection
Time took a hold and I was a man
I have self respect
Please tell me what you think.
=)
Please tell me your thoughts, and ways I can edit, and make it better.
I am probably only a beginner at writing poetry and find it difficult to see the lines
of poetry and not poetry. I had to be first person of Piri Thomas, and write his life
getting it from the biography novel we read...
I read his book Down These Mean Streets.
Hopefully this poem conveys it enough...
Chocolate eyes,the brownest of skin
The white of Mami and siblings protected them
Shame filled excuses given for those who needed
I am not black but Puerto Rican! I say
Father always went away
But came back to look upon siblings with joy
I wonder if he loved me as much
Hateful words and uneasy glances
Directed at me
I was just a kid
My heart could not take it
The rough touch of resentment and hatred seized me
My eyes were open yet blind
Overwhelming shame and anger
A blurred line between them and myself
A division of races
I'll show them, I have heart!
With my fist and my gun
Let's see who gets respect now
It lessens the pain when I'm with my gang
Only the fight brings us closer
The drug makes us forget together
Always I needed the money but no respectable job
I pushed crack on the streets
The white powder was my best friend
Numbing the sorrow and guilt that plagued me
Addiction had its way of making a home
I wasted in the smoke of the lost
When I look in the mirror
It hurt me to see I was unrecognizable
Blood shot eyes,chapped cracked lips
Craters claimed my arms
I didn't listen to anyone
My gang listened to ME
But who am I?
Bang, goes the gun
Screams, Sirens, Scrambling,Crying
I need the money I know I am not forgiven
I shot a cop and was charged with first degree burglary
Please I don't want to die
The cold metal bars held my insanity
I am not the person they think I am
Years could only pass to finally learn
Behind dark lights I had found God
I had found pure integrity and self control
No more fights, and no more white powder
It was real
What I was missing now I had found
The hole slowly filled
Control
I now saw my reflection
Time took a hold and I was a man
I have self respect
Please tell me what you think.
=)
Please tell me your thoughts, and ways I can edit, and make it better.