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miams
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Please let me know your thoughts on my poem! Really appreciate it!
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=5F-fJhINgdM
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=5F-fJhINgdM
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Pocket Protectorate
Guest
That was very nice...
(A touch too "gooshy," though...)
(A touch too "gooshy," though...)
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Curly
Guest
yer its ok...
for a 6 year old
for a 6 year old
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Luke M
Guest
ironic and vain.
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Marsha
Guest
I thought that it was good, but I didn't understand some of the sentences, like you said things that if you said them in real life people would get what you meant of course, but be like uhhh?. Also make sure you relate you phrases together, someone of them were not really related in terms of what you where saying at all. Also try to hold back less, it seemed a bit structured. But regardless, I thought it was nice, and the rhythm if the syllables sounds good
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Paige!
Guest
don't listen to the 6 year old answer. its amazing! just remember that not all poems need to rhyme. good luck!