Ethereal

[Flying_Tarotot]

"I want to feel the surge
of binary flowing,
no, coursing unceasingly
through my circuits
and miscellaneous processing modules;

to embrace the way
in which 1

 

[Maresa Sp]

overall i like it, it has a cyberpunk feeling too it.

my nitpicks is it doesn't have any "hooks" in it to keep the reader interested, if someone who wasn't a fan of this sort of stuff read it, what would keep them reading?

 

[John Bradley]

"to walk/glide/fly
without the fear that this day
may be the last for me, that i will
never be able to dance with the rays
of the sun, in every spectrum, as men
slam car doors and journey home
for the night;"


This is horrible not.

 

[Lorna W]

That comment made sense not.

 

[calmlikeatimebomb]

Translation: That was a really impressive stanza. Keep making things.