Does this sentence make sense? (easy 10 pts)?

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Having no music would not be to a tolerable degree.

i'm writing a poem, so does that ^ make sense?
its suposed to mean that having no music is intolerable.
if it doesnt make sense, then can you revise it?
it has to rhyme with "be"
 
no i do not think it does,

Having no music would be like loosing the key

i like it, its also profound
 
i think it makes pretty good sense

maybe even
Having no music would be to no tolerable degree

just a suggestion :)
 
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