wrapperjrracing
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Oh, and just so you know, I don't plan on writing this in any sort of format. The only person who needs to understand the script is myself, so I am not going to waste my time doing the proper script-writing technique here.
I just finished watching about 6 videos on developing a story. I decided to give it a try by writing one. I started with a main character, who encounters a problem and has to take a trip to the store. Then I added about 5 or six complications to develop the story. It is meant to be funny, so I added a few crazy bits in it. This took me about 8 minutes to type, it all came to my mind at once. For once I didn't have writers block, YAY! Anyway, Here's the script, DONT STEAL IT FROM ME OR I WILL FIND YOU!
Main Character: Max (Name actually unimportant, no voices in final animated short)
"Synopsis: Max finishes his 40 page report on the stock market's recent failure, amid decent furnishings, only to find that his printer dies halfway through the printing process. It is 11:40, and and Max goes speeding out into the night to get to the nearest Stapler's. On the way, he looks from the road where a 45 speed limit sign flies by, to his dash. He looks at his fuel gauge which has a blinking E. Next to it, the speedometer reads 60. He pulls into a Hexon station to fill up. On the way out, a police cruiser follows him out. He gets back up to 60, at which point the police cruiser flashes it's lights and blares the sirens. The cop gives Max TWO tickets, one for speeding and one for the faulty brake lights. Max grumbles and gets back on the road, considerably slower than before. Finally, he arrives at Stapler's, at 12:00. Max rushes to the doors but they are locked. The sign in the windows states 'Store Hours – 10AM – midnight' Max looks across the street and spots an Office Warehouse. Just as he notices it, the neon lights shut off above the store. Then the parking lot lights switch off. Max, now in the dark, is almost out of patience as he begins twitching. He frantically looks around and sees a tiny grey and blue dot in the distance. He then remembers that there is a 24 hour Paul Mart just ten minutes away. He jumps in his car and drives maniacally down the road, speeding through stop signs and running red lights. The police cruiser that pulled him over before starts chasing him again but this time he doesn't stop. He is sweating now, and his vision is blurred and out of focus. The Paul Mart is within sight after 30 seconds. The sirens are blaring and the car approaches 140MPH as he notices a large Truck pulling out of the gas station he passed earlier. He can't stop in time and crashes into the truck in a head on collision. Fade out, and back in to a scene where Max is being hauled away in a stretcher. He looks to the side and can see a shiny new printer through the windows, but he can't reach it, it's too far gone. The short ends with Max behind bars in a bare cell."
I plan on making this, I guess you would call it instrumental. I am just going to have music based on what is going on, like intense drum beats for the final chase, and stuff like that. So there is no dialogue. This is the very first story I ever wrote with the serious intention of making it myself. Does anyone have any tips on what I might be able to improve on?
Oh, and just so you know, I don't plan on writing this in any sort of format. The only person who needs to understand the script is myself, so I am not going to waste my time doing the proper script-writing technique here.
I just finished watching about 6 videos on developing a story. I decided to give it a try by writing one. I started with a main character, who encounters a problem and has to take a trip to the store. Then I added about 5 or six complications to develop the story. It is meant to be funny, so I added a few crazy bits in it. This took me about 8 minutes to type, it all came to my mind at once. For once I didn't have writers block, YAY! Anyway, Here's the script, DONT STEAL IT FROM ME OR I WILL FIND YOU!
Main Character: Max (Name actually unimportant, no voices in final animated short)
"Synopsis: Max finishes his 40 page report on the stock market's recent failure, amid decent furnishings, only to find that his printer dies halfway through the printing process. It is 11:40, and and Max goes speeding out into the night to get to the nearest Stapler's. On the way, he looks from the road where a 45 speed limit sign flies by, to his dash. He looks at his fuel gauge which has a blinking E. Next to it, the speedometer reads 60. He pulls into a Hexon station to fill up. On the way out, a police cruiser follows him out. He gets back up to 60, at which point the police cruiser flashes it's lights and blares the sirens. The cop gives Max TWO tickets, one for speeding and one for the faulty brake lights. Max grumbles and gets back on the road, considerably slower than before. Finally, he arrives at Stapler's, at 12:00. Max rushes to the doors but they are locked. The sign in the windows states 'Store Hours – 10AM – midnight' Max looks across the street and spots an Office Warehouse. Just as he notices it, the neon lights shut off above the store. Then the parking lot lights switch off. Max, now in the dark, is almost out of patience as he begins twitching. He frantically looks around and sees a tiny grey and blue dot in the distance. He then remembers that there is a 24 hour Paul Mart just ten minutes away. He jumps in his car and drives maniacally down the road, speeding through stop signs and running red lights. The police cruiser that pulled him over before starts chasing him again but this time he doesn't stop. He is sweating now, and his vision is blurred and out of focus. The Paul Mart is within sight after 30 seconds. The sirens are blaring and the car approaches 140MPH as he notices a large Truck pulling out of the gas station he passed earlier. He can't stop in time and crashes into the truck in a head on collision. Fade out, and back in to a scene where Max is being hauled away in a stretcher. He looks to the side and can see a shiny new printer through the windows, but he can't reach it, it's too far gone. The short ends with Max behind bars in a bare cell."
I plan on making this, I guess you would call it instrumental. I am just going to have music based on what is going on, like intense drum beats for the final chase, and stuff like that. So there is no dialogue. This is the very first story I ever wrote with the serious intention of making it myself. Does anyone have any tips on what I might be able to improve on?
Oh, and just so you know, I don't plan on writing this in any sort of format. The only person who needs to understand the script is myself, so I am not going to waste my time doing the proper script-writing technique here.