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This is a half fact half fiction story (or little piece of a story, to be exact) and I was wondering if it was any good?! All answers welcome. Thanks!
He stood too close behind me. Way too close. I thought he was going to touch my thigh or my back, since I was wearing shorts and a tank top. It was early August, and in Florida, it felt like a desert. He disgusted me, with his little smirks when I accidentally glanced at him. I didn't want my sister around him, and I wanted to kick the crap out of him myself. We were waiting in line at Adventure Land, getting tokens for the bumper cars. I sat next to my cousin, because I didn't want to sit next to him. My sister didn't mind sitting next to him, and I knew she'd be okay, because if he did ANYTHING to put her life in danger, I know she'd find a way to get herself to safety. By now, you'd want to know what "his" name is. Well, it's Jeremy. Jeremy the perverted, disgusting pig.
When we got back to my Aunts little house, I sat on the couch for a second just to relax. Then came in Jeremy, who, even though there were two spots on the couch he could sit on, sat right beside my right leg. I could feel his body heat for second time in a row that day, and wanted slap him upside the head. He drove me crazy (not in a love way, in a way that means "I hate your guts"). I watched my sister, Jeremy, and my Aunt play the Wii for about maybe 20 minutes before getting up to go take a shower. I was always afraid he'd walk in the door while I was in the shower... And I always locked the door, took a quick bath (only washing my hair once while we were there) and got out and changed as quick as possible. After I got changed, I didn't go back into the living room. I went to my cousins room and turned on the TV. I always went there after she took us somewhere. We stayed out until about 12:00, maybe even later. And she doesn't go to bed until about 5 A.M. So, I got the TV to myself until then. I mostly watched MTV, watching the music videos, and making mental notes of songs I liked. My sister walked back there, her face flushed.
"What's wrong?" I asked her.
"He... He... T-touched me..." she whispered. I crawled over the bed, and went and stood in front of my sister.
"What do you mean he touched you?" I said.
"You know what I mean! You watch Law & Order SVU! You SHOULD know!!" she yelled. I heard the living room go quiet for a moment, and then my Aunt came to the bedroom.
"What's wrong baby?" she said.
"Jeremy... He touched me." said Kacy (my sisters name, by the way).
"Oh my... Are you sure?" my Aunt asked, genuine concern in her eyes.
"Yes I'm sure! Call the police!!!" Kacy screamed.
"Take her to the bathroom and get her cleaned up. I'll take care of the rest." said my Aunt.
"She can go by herself. I want to give that piece of crap an ear-full." I said. I took my sister to the bathroom, got her her pajamas, and left her alone. I went into the living room, where it was quiet. I looked around, and realized it was taking place outside. I went out there, and put my hands on my hips.
"She's lying! I didn't touch her!" Jeremy yelled. He talked way too fast, so you had to have a quick mind to understand what he was saying.
"Are you calling my sister a LIAR?" I asked him, taking a step closer.
"Those two were in there! They would have seen me if I touched her!" he pointed his finger at my Aunt and cousin, who stood together, looking as mad as I have ever seen.
"Now you listen here, you fat piece of crap! My sister wouldn't lie about something like this! She would NEVER and I repeat NEVER do that! So if your gonna make excuses for yourself, well then your SOL!" I crossed my arms, never taking my eyes off him. I took another step closer, about an inch away from his face. His back was toward my Aunt and cousin, so they couldn't really see my expression. He put his hand on my bum, and I took it off and twisted it. I heard the pop, and knew I had broken it. I wanted to break the other one, but kept my impulsiveness in check.
"God bless it! You broke my arm!" he took his good, unbroken arm and pushed me, and I pushed him back. He landed flat on the floor, and I stood over him. My Aunt and cousin were too shocked, so I said the words I had wanted to say since I met him.
"F*** you." And with that, I turned on my heel and went to check on my sister.
How was it?! Again, all answers welcome. Thanks a lot!
He stood too close behind me. Way too close. I thought he was going to touch my thigh or my back, since I was wearing shorts and a tank top. It was early August, and in Florida, it felt like a desert. He disgusted me, with his little smirks when I accidentally glanced at him. I didn't want my sister around him, and I wanted to kick the crap out of him myself. We were waiting in line at Adventure Land, getting tokens for the bumper cars. I sat next to my cousin, because I didn't want to sit next to him. My sister didn't mind sitting next to him, and I knew she'd be okay, because if he did ANYTHING to put her life in danger, I know she'd find a way to get herself to safety. By now, you'd want to know what "his" name is. Well, it's Jeremy. Jeremy the perverted, disgusting pig.
When we got back to my Aunts little house, I sat on the couch for a second just to relax. Then came in Jeremy, who, even though there were two spots on the couch he could sit on, sat right beside my right leg. I could feel his body heat for second time in a row that day, and wanted slap him upside the head. He drove me crazy (not in a love way, in a way that means "I hate your guts"). I watched my sister, Jeremy, and my Aunt play the Wii for about maybe 20 minutes before getting up to go take a shower. I was always afraid he'd walk in the door while I was in the shower... And I always locked the door, took a quick bath (only washing my hair once while we were there) and got out and changed as quick as possible. After I got changed, I didn't go back into the living room. I went to my cousins room and turned on the TV. I always went there after she took us somewhere. We stayed out until about 12:00, maybe even later. And she doesn't go to bed until about 5 A.M. So, I got the TV to myself until then. I mostly watched MTV, watching the music videos, and making mental notes of songs I liked. My sister walked back there, her face flushed.
"What's wrong?" I asked her.
"He... He... T-touched me..." she whispered. I crawled over the bed, and went and stood in front of my sister.
"What do you mean he touched you?" I said.
"You know what I mean! You watch Law & Order SVU! You SHOULD know!!" she yelled. I heard the living room go quiet for a moment, and then my Aunt came to the bedroom.
"What's wrong baby?" she said.
"Jeremy... He touched me." said Kacy (my sisters name, by the way).
"Oh my... Are you sure?" my Aunt asked, genuine concern in her eyes.
"Yes I'm sure! Call the police!!!" Kacy screamed.
"Take her to the bathroom and get her cleaned up. I'll take care of the rest." said my Aunt.
"She can go by herself. I want to give that piece of crap an ear-full." I said. I took my sister to the bathroom, got her her pajamas, and left her alone. I went into the living room, where it was quiet. I looked around, and realized it was taking place outside. I went out there, and put my hands on my hips.
"She's lying! I didn't touch her!" Jeremy yelled. He talked way too fast, so you had to have a quick mind to understand what he was saying.
"Are you calling my sister a LIAR?" I asked him, taking a step closer.
"Those two were in there! They would have seen me if I touched her!" he pointed his finger at my Aunt and cousin, who stood together, looking as mad as I have ever seen.
"Now you listen here, you fat piece of crap! My sister wouldn't lie about something like this! She would NEVER and I repeat NEVER do that! So if your gonna make excuses for yourself, well then your SOL!" I crossed my arms, never taking my eyes off him. I took another step closer, about an inch away from his face. His back was toward my Aunt and cousin, so they couldn't really see my expression. He put his hand on my bum, and I took it off and twisted it. I heard the pop, and knew I had broken it. I wanted to break the other one, but kept my impulsiveness in check.
"God bless it! You broke my arm!" he took his good, unbroken arm and pushed me, and I pushed him back. He landed flat on the floor, and I stood over him. My Aunt and cousin were too shocked, so I said the words I had wanted to say since I met him.
"F*** you." And with that, I turned on my heel and went to check on my sister.
How was it?! Again, all answers welcome. Thanks a lot!