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twilightlover:)
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so, I had to write two original poems for my english class because my teacher is creating an anthropology and I was wondering what you guys thought of these. good, bad? don't be afraid to tell me if they are bad, I would rather you tell me than my teacher or my class, haha .plus, if you see any grammar, punctuation errors could you please tell me !(especially in the second one-Every Day & Every Night.)
thanks in advance! .. here they are :
I Love You.
If only I could see your face one more time.
If only I could hear your voice one more time.
If only I could take your hand one more time.
If only I could see you laugh one more time.
If only I could sit down with you one more time.
If only I could look into your eyes one more time.
If only I could get your attention one more time.
If only I could spend the day with you one more time.
If only I could talk to you one more time.
I would be sure to tell you I Love You.
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Every Day and Every Night.
Every day as the bright sun sets.
Every day as the rowdy ocean calms down,
Every day as the world settles in for a good nights rest,
I think of you.
Every day as time slips away.
Every day as the birds fly away.
Every day as you slip farther and farther away,
I think of you.
And every night while the world sleeps.
And every night as my thoughts run deep.
Your face locates itself in my dreams,
And causes me to wish it seems,
That you were here with me every second of every day,
And that you were here to stay.
Every day, and Every night
I hope and pray that you are alright,
and the only way I sleep at night
is because I know you are waiting for me
and that someday we will meet again.
thanks in advance! .. here they are :
I Love You.
If only I could see your face one more time.
If only I could hear your voice one more time.
If only I could take your hand one more time.
If only I could see you laugh one more time.
If only I could sit down with you one more time.
If only I could look into your eyes one more time.
If only I could get your attention one more time.
If only I could spend the day with you one more time.
If only I could talk to you one more time.
I would be sure to tell you I Love You.
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Every Day and Every Night.
Every day as the bright sun sets.
Every day as the rowdy ocean calms down,
Every day as the world settles in for a good nights rest,
I think of you.
Every day as time slips away.
Every day as the birds fly away.
Every day as you slip farther and farther away,
I think of you.
And every night while the world sleeps.
And every night as my thoughts run deep.
Your face locates itself in my dreams,
And causes me to wish it seems,
That you were here with me every second of every day,
And that you were here to stay.
Every day, and Every night
I hope and pray that you are alright,
and the only way I sleep at night
is because I know you are waiting for me
and that someday we will meet again.