Do you like this poem i wrote?

[DanceObsessed]

Teach me the way to be humble and good
Because I don't know who that is in the mirror
All I see is a mask
A mask of goodness
That isn't me
Then I see you...
The only person that knows the real me
But you shouldn't know the real me
its too dangerous for you
so you will now see what everybody else sees..
invisibility

PLEASE TELL ME WHAT YOU THINK OF IT!!
I also don't know what to call it. any advice?
i was also wondering if you think i could have a career in writing. I'm only 12, but you know...

 

[New Moon]

i like it but i think you should of posted it in the poems catergory

 

[Rami]

well..... It's kind of weird and a little emo. but hey that's what I think.

 

[UrbanPhotos]

I don't like poetry. But I like the concept you're toying with; how we all put on these fake public personalities that hide our real selves.

 

[kar]

I like it you're definitely better at writing poems then I am. Call it something like "invisible" "imaginary" or "hidden". I have never been good with titles so sorry if those are crap ideas. The poem reminds me of "Everybody's fool" by Evanescence.

edit: If you keep writing, and working with different ideas, practicing, ect. I think you could have a shot at it.