Do you like my poetry?

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either you got issues to work out with people or you got talent to write about different topics?
 
There she stands on a cold eerie night.
Eyes glowing dead as the moonlight.
Starring at the blood on the ground.
The body lay dead and makes no sound.
Her thoughts full of confusion and rage.
Her mind now so twisted and insane.
She laughs at this evil killing game.
Killing like a spreading disease.
Ate her soul like cancer.
And she can take it no more.
Waiting for death to come and lore her into it's golden doors.
And she can take the silence no longer.
her heart beating ever so stronger.
Took the knife with a slit to her throat.
A suicidal disaster. Death now so much faster. could live with her sins no longer.



I'm 11.
 
You've got a very dark edge to your poems, my dear. Aside from being totally disturbed, I get it and think it's not bad. I don't "like" it, but it's not the kind of poem I think the word "like" applies to. I think you did a good job with such gruesome subject matter. As Gothic and macabre as i can be myself, I would still love to see you handle some slightly lighter material at some point.
 
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