Peace Forever!
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Okay, I've never been much of a poet, but I thought of this little poem and I thought it sounded sorta cool in a way, but I'm not sure. I want you to be honest about it, but not rude. Is there anything you suggest? I don't really think the last line fits, so.... yeah. Here it is:
I cannot stand, this roaring fire.
It eats my soul,
my one desire.
My mind goes blank, my heart goes cold,
It swells inside, it eats my pride.
How can I live, with so much hate?
So much fear, I anticipate
This anger inside,
Cannot be quenched,
This fire that burns within.
I cannot stand, this roaring fire.
It eats my soul,
my one desire.
My mind goes blank, my heart goes cold,
It swells inside, it eats my pride.
How can I live, with so much hate?
So much fear, I anticipate
This anger inside,
Cannot be quenched,
This fire that burns within.