jack schitt
New member
I'm in the process of writing a short story about a man at mid-life crises age. These couple of line don't read right to me. Can you give me a second opinion?
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The Blue Danube played loudly as the fountains of Belagio did their thing.
Why was he still stuck in the past? He had come to Vegas to take his mind off of his troubles. It seemed to be working only as much as drunk twenty-somethings, hookers, and gambling tended to, which is to say, not at all.
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The Blue Danube played loudly as the fountains of Belagio did their thing.
Why was he still stuck in the past? He had come to Vegas to take his mind off of his troubles. It seemed to be working only as much as drunk twenty-somethings, hookers, and gambling tended to, which is to say, not at all.