Do I have any talent in poetry?**poems included** PLEASE READ AND RATE!?

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stay with me:

save me from this deep blue water
save me from this sea
save me as this day gets hotter
just save me..from me

i dont think i can take this wait
im ready to jump in
now that its gettin late
im swimmin in love & no its not a sin

just when it starts to thunder
your about to pull me under
if you break me...that pains hard to mend
please dont hurt me...stay with me till the end


abiding love:

I hadn't thought of you,
in such a long time.
Until this very day i viewed,
a memory of mine.

It had you,
and it had me.
And by your side,
I felt so right.

These very tears i shed,
and these very tears i cry.
These tears are what make
this love abide.

if:

if i was your girl
id feel so special
id keep you forever
id mend that broken heart
and hurt you never

if you loved me
id try my best
id love you back
and leave the rest

if i had a chance
id show you that its meant to be
id try my hardest to help you see
youll never find another girl like me
 
You have talent without a doubt! I love the fact that you created repetition of words to accent the emotion. Great job on such a beutiful piece of poetry!
 
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