Different poetry style, what do you think?

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5koalas

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I wrote this poem and the style is different than most. I just want to try and gage what people think of my writing, in particular, this poem.
Reality --

Silently. Searching for an answer...
“Is this the way you want it?”
Monotone. Responding to the obvious…
“No. That’s not the way I want it.”
The Multitude of peoples, chanting within your mind...
“Beat her down.”
“Beat her down.”
Your decision-
“Yes. Beat her down.”
Silently. Searching for an answer…
“Is this the way you want it?”
Monotone. Responding to the obvious...
“No. That’s not the way I want it.”
The Multitude of peoples, chanting the decision, singing without a voice...
“Beat her down.”
“Beat her down.”
Your decision-
“Yes. Beat her down.”
Silently. Searching for an answer…
“Is this the way you want it?”
Monotone. Responding to the obvious...
“No. That’s not the way I want it.”
The multitude of peoples, speaking from your mind the unquenchable thirst for my blood..
“Beat her down.”
“Beat her down.”
Your decision-
“Yes. Beat her down.”
 
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