Would this be a good rebuttal?
"You’re right everyone is diverse, yet the fact remains that corporate marketing heavily influences, if not, predisposes us towards buying the advertised items such as: cell phones, clothing, shoes, food, etc…; this being true not only for students yet society in general. If we reflect upon the decades that have passed, we’d easily be able to see how people have been so easily manipulated by corporate marketing time and time again. Whether it was platform shoes, lava lamps, and muscle cars in the 70’s, or 20 years later when spandex shorts, leather jackets, and Discman were sported by all in the 90’s, it’s evident regardless of the period in time that corporate marketing was a top reason, amongst few others, for the adolescent as well as extended adolescent-consumerism of said items. Much of what we consumers learn about the world is filtered through marketers via advertising. Many are led to believe through advertising that the products have magical properties; the product will do special and mysterious things for them in a way that will transform are lives. In conclusion students, as well as a majority of our society, are unable to navigate corporate marketing’s elaborate, well designed, conformist-promoting ads, and have not been able to do so for quite a long period of time."
Do I sway of topic anywhere or find anything that needs to be changed?
"You’re right everyone is diverse, yet the fact remains that corporate marketing heavily influences, if not, predisposes us towards buying the advertised items such as: cell phones, clothing, shoes, food, etc…; this being true not only for students yet society in general. If we reflect upon the decades that have passed, we’d easily be able to see how people have been so easily manipulated by corporate marketing time and time again. Whether it was platform shoes, lava lamps, and muscle cars in the 70’s, or 20 years later when spandex shorts, leather jackets, and Discman were sported by all in the 90’s, it’s evident regardless of the period in time that corporate marketing was a top reason, amongst few others, for the adolescent as well as extended adolescent-consumerism of said items. Much of what we consumers learn about the world is filtered through marketers via advertising. Many are led to believe through advertising that the products have magical properties; the product will do special and mysterious things for them in a way that will transform are lives. In conclusion students, as well as a majority of our society, are unable to navigate corporate marketing’s elaborate, well designed, conformist-promoting ads, and have not been able to do so for quite a long period of time."
Do I sway of topic anywhere or find anything that needs to be changed?