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Elle Phillip <3
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In English class we read a poem, did an analysis on it, then had to write our own. So I randomly decided to put it on here and get some feedback. So feedback, people!
The dark air creeps around me,
Treading softly; as light as a Gazelle
Even without sight, I imagine
The leaves crunching underfoot.
A streetlamp flickers into existence
Casting this winter world into the harsh fluorescence.
My footsteps echo down dingy alleys,
My breath rises as fog, into the dying air.
The sleeping city sighs its sorrow,
For all things decaying inside its walls.
My heart quickens, my breath is shallow,
My heart is thumping like a humming bird’s wings.
For suddenly, there is light;
A bright, illuminating light that shimmers like crystal
Then, I’m around the corner and all that lies before me
Is an old, forgotten square.
Thanks,
Elle x
The dark air creeps around me,
Treading softly; as light as a Gazelle
Even without sight, I imagine
The leaves crunching underfoot.
A streetlamp flickers into existence
Casting this winter world into the harsh fluorescence.
My footsteps echo down dingy alleys,
My breath rises as fog, into the dying air.
The sleeping city sighs its sorrow,
For all things decaying inside its walls.
My heart quickens, my breath is shallow,
My heart is thumping like a humming bird’s wings.
For suddenly, there is light;
A bright, illuminating light that shimmers like crystal
Then, I’m around the corner and all that lies before me
Is an old, forgotten square.
Thanks,
Elle x