could you rate my poem on a scale 1-10?

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Lazy Eye, took over me.
Blinded and I can't see
Head spinnin' and I don't know why
Lets see, Who can truly fly

Lazy eye, lookin' around
Don't fear, i'm coming down
What happened? What happened to me?
Whatever did; I need some more in me.

Lazy eye, Resumed it's reign
Controllin' my mind again
when? When will all of this end?
or is it something I'll have to befriend?
 
I loved it all.
except the second stanza;
the last two lines I did't really get.

However I think this is amazing!
I give you a 9.5
 
I give it a 7.. It good but it can be great... Good short poem.. I guess you can add more to it.. I like the vibe of this poem.. Keep working on it and it can be great
 
i really like this poem i thought it was very intriguing i would give it a 9 3/4. it may sound weird but it almost gave me the thought that it had a deeper meaning.
 
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