Could you help me improve on my monoloug by giving suggestions.. (first time writing...

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...one....)? I was given the task to write a monologue for the chairman who introduces the show and the performers at the music hall... this is what i have come up with so far, please help even if its giving suggestions on better words to put in... i have a very low vocabulary...

Welcome, welcome ladies and gentlemen, welcome to the show, behind this door lays scenes of aura, mystery and wonder that you will never witness anywhere else in London! You won’t be disappointed, be prepared to be dazzled and amazed as we have selected the finest of the finest to perform on our stage for you this evening, hold onto your hats and coats as we have a magician that will blow you away with their tricks of wonder, his splendid show has been prepared for you so you may experience the mysteries or the east, we have singers, who will render you speechless and acrobats that will have you holding your breath as they face fear itself for you tonight we have prepared this special line up.
I have been asked to let you in early as the weather tonight is blistering cold, so if you could all be so kind as to enter and go to your seats as quietly as possible as our first act of tonight is still preparing, make sure to keep your tickets handy for our raffle later on in the show, if you would like to follow me.
Now ladies and gentlemen in the year of our lord 1859 lets raise our glasses to queen Victoria! Our empress of India the country of extraordinary spices.
 
Its rambly and mental.

'as we have a magician that will blow you away with their tricks of '

Don't mix singular and plural.

'we have singers, who will render you speechless'

Why / how?

'as they face fear itself '

sounds crap

'blistering cold'

Blisteringly cold

'Now ladies and gentlemen in the year of our lord 1859 lets raise our glasses to queen Victoria! Our empress of India the country of extraordinary spices'

wtf?
 
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