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I wrote this for school a year ago, I was 13. Sorry if there are any errors I missed correcting.
I scuttled my way thru the moist ground beneath my scaly body. The further I went I felt as if the leaves swaying in the dark were laughing, and they were laughing at me. I shuddered in disgust as I expanded stretching and relieving the excruciating tension I was drowned in. Albeit the physical stress hitting me like a thousand knives, It didn’t compare to the trauma inside me. The anger swept thru me as the memories came back. The horrific unwanted reminders of how I lost my eggs helplessly to that stupid cunning red-eyed beast! I tried to think of something else, anything else that that wouldn’t bring my salty eyes pitiful tears, but it was impossible to forget. I’ve never felt so reckless before, so useless and guilty. I sighed then soonly hushed up as I heard a distant hiss behind me. It was only Nag. As he got closer the atmosphere got colder and the leaves laughter became louder and more noticeable having no sympathy for me. He was now two inches away as he whispered something into my trembling ears. “Get a hold of yourself Nagaina. “It’s not the end of the world”. He let out a shattered hiss and continued. “Do you see what you’ve become?!” “Do you see what your doing to yourself!? He hissed once more and slithered to my left where my face extended . I realized I didn’t respond to his pointless concern. I wasn’t paying much attention to him, only to the leaves cruel taunting that only became louder by the second. Obviously he was taking this better then I was. But how would he know how I felt? How would he know how it “feels” to be a mother. To bring something so precious and so innocent into the world only to have it taken away from you right before it even hatches!? Of course he didn’t know. As much as he had loved them, I just couldn’t let it go. I became more aware of his presence as he used his angelic voice. “I’m sorry Nagaina, I shouldn’t have said that.” “I know how hard it is for you.” “It’s hard for me too, believe me, but it’s been over three months now; I can’t bear to see you in this depressive condition any longer.” He waited awhile for my response, maybe even a slight movement or twitch to bring him satisfaction, but I was a rock. I so badly wanted to tell him that I was sorry too; that I was working on it and things wouldn’t have to be like this anymore; that we could be happy again. But I couldn’t promise him that when it probably would never happen. So he quietly slid away defeated. I felt rotten. I felt like a cowered. So insecure and afraid. I slithered away too now deep into the immense bungalow. I shivered from the cool breeze that swept by. It was now colder and darker, close to my mood. My swollen eyes got heavy. I was exhausted. I cuddled by a peaceful tree who’s leaves kept quiet and rested. Maybe things would be better tomorrow. Maybe I’ve been living in a nightmare for three months and I would awaken with relief and laughter. But I was only kidding myself. “Not a chance” I whispered softly in my head as I quickly drifted away unconscious.
Judge it as you please. I can take It.
And I know it's a bit long.. sorry!
lol I was supposed to be really descriptive. That was the point. But yeah I can see what you are saying.
Pocahontas- They are snakes, and thanks! (from a story Rikki-Tikki-Tavi ) We had to pick a situation in it and elaborate on it with a lot of detail and discription. Also some vocabulary words. So yeah.. I'm probably not gonna be an Author, but oh well, my teacher liked it, So it's great because I passed! lol
I scuttled my way thru the moist ground beneath my scaly body. The further I went I felt as if the leaves swaying in the dark were laughing, and they were laughing at me. I shuddered in disgust as I expanded stretching and relieving the excruciating tension I was drowned in. Albeit the physical stress hitting me like a thousand knives, It didn’t compare to the trauma inside me. The anger swept thru me as the memories came back. The horrific unwanted reminders of how I lost my eggs helplessly to that stupid cunning red-eyed beast! I tried to think of something else, anything else that that wouldn’t bring my salty eyes pitiful tears, but it was impossible to forget. I’ve never felt so reckless before, so useless and guilty. I sighed then soonly hushed up as I heard a distant hiss behind me. It was only Nag. As he got closer the atmosphere got colder and the leaves laughter became louder and more noticeable having no sympathy for me. He was now two inches away as he whispered something into my trembling ears. “Get a hold of yourself Nagaina. “It’s not the end of the world”. He let out a shattered hiss and continued. “Do you see what you’ve become?!” “Do you see what your doing to yourself!? He hissed once more and slithered to my left where my face extended . I realized I didn’t respond to his pointless concern. I wasn’t paying much attention to him, only to the leaves cruel taunting that only became louder by the second. Obviously he was taking this better then I was. But how would he know how I felt? How would he know how it “feels” to be a mother. To bring something so precious and so innocent into the world only to have it taken away from you right before it even hatches!? Of course he didn’t know. As much as he had loved them, I just couldn’t let it go. I became more aware of his presence as he used his angelic voice. “I’m sorry Nagaina, I shouldn’t have said that.” “I know how hard it is for you.” “It’s hard for me too, believe me, but it’s been over three months now; I can’t bear to see you in this depressive condition any longer.” He waited awhile for my response, maybe even a slight movement or twitch to bring him satisfaction, but I was a rock. I so badly wanted to tell him that I was sorry too; that I was working on it and things wouldn’t have to be like this anymore; that we could be happy again. But I couldn’t promise him that when it probably would never happen. So he quietly slid away defeated. I felt rotten. I felt like a cowered. So insecure and afraid. I slithered away too now deep into the immense bungalow. I shivered from the cool breeze that swept by. It was now colder and darker, close to my mood. My swollen eyes got heavy. I was exhausted. I cuddled by a peaceful tree who’s leaves kept quiet and rested. Maybe things would be better tomorrow. Maybe I’ve been living in a nightmare for three months and I would awaken with relief and laughter. But I was only kidding myself. “Not a chance” I whispered softly in my head as I quickly drifted away unconscious.
Judge it as you please. I can take It.
And I know it's a bit long.. sorry!
lol I was supposed to be really descriptive. That was the point. But yeah I can see what you are saying.
Pocahontas- They are snakes, and thanks! (from a story Rikki-Tikki-Tavi ) We had to pick a situation in it and elaborate on it with a lot of detail and discription. Also some vocabulary words. So yeah.. I'm probably not gonna be an Author, but oh well, my teacher liked it, So it's great because I passed! lol