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I pressed my hand against the icy glass,
And watched him walk straight pass.
He loped along gracefully without a glance,
Which should have meant to me, there was no chance.
I dried my eyes with my sleeve
It broke my heart to see him leave.
Hand in hand he wanted to be
With a girl who was not me.
I bit my lip and stroked her pretty face
I looked down at her eyes that stared into a different place
I grasped my gun with a firm hold.
It numbed my hand with its cold
The door opened with a creak.
And I saw his mesmerising eyes peek.
Into the room where she lay,
I had killed her this very day.
He looked at me with an livid surprise
And I pulled the gun up, and let it rise.
Against my temple, I pushed the gun.
He looked scared and was about to run.
I gave him a look of utter misery
At the fact that he had never wanted me
And no I'm not actually planning to kill myself and his girlfriend.
I pressed my hand against the icy glass,
And watched him walk straight pass.
He loped along gracefully without a glance,
Which should have meant to me, there was no chance.
I dried my eyes with my sleeve
It broke my heart to see him leave.
Hand in hand he wanted to be
With a girl who was not me.
I bit my lip and stroked her pretty face
I looked down at her eyes that stared into a different place
I grasped my gun with a firm hold.
It numbed my hand with its cold
The door opened with a creak.
And I saw his mesmerising eyes peek.
Into the room where she lay,
I had killed her this very day.
He looked at me with an livid surprise
And I pulled the gun up, and let it rise.
Against my temple, I pushed the gun.
He looked scared and was about to run.
I gave him a look of utter misery
At the fact that he had never wanted me
And no I'm not actually planning to kill myself and his girlfriend.