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Story #1- it's very creepy 7
Story #2 - it sucks 2
Story #3- It's very funny 9
Story # 4- it's pathetic 4

The Haunted Spanish House story # 1)

One day, there was a family of fourfrom Manila wants to go to a beach in Pangasinan. The members of that family are the two parents; Jenny, their daughter; and John, their son. They want to stay in the beach for two weeks. In the beach where they will go to, there is a nearby beautiful Spanish house. It was built in the 16th century. The family stayed in the Spanish house which they don’t know is haunted. The design of the house looks Spanish. “This is a beautiful house” the mom said. Jenny can somehow sense ghosts, she feels like there are ghosts in the house and the ghosts doesn’t want anybody to go in that house. She would sometimes feel like she was being watched. One day, the dad was awoken because he heard someone say this “Go away (in Spanish)” He thought he was just imagining so he went back to sleep. One day, John was awoken because he heard screams for help. It was coming from outside the bedroom. He tried not to be scared so he went out to check where the screams came from. He found no one but he found blood on the floor. He was really scared that he screamed. One night, the mom felt like her bed was wet. She checked it and she found blood on her bed. She was really scared. One day, John is playing outside when he heard somebody fell from the stairs. He checked what it was and he saw a man on the floor, his head was opened and blood was coming out of his head and he suddenly disappeared. John was really frightened. One day, Jenny is lying on the bed when she heard someone say “Help me”. She was alone in the house at that time. She was really frightened. One time the mom is eating when suddenly she heard footsteps on the stairs. She was the only one in the house. She got really scared. One day, John was in the kitchen, then he saw a Spanish woman whose head has a knife and it looked like she was stabbed repeatedly. John screamed and ran out of the kitchen. One day, the dad was staying upstairs then he saw a Spanish man with a hole in his heart. He knew that the man was shot with a gun and it hit his heart. The man suddenly disappeared. The dad ran outside screaming. One day, the mom went inside her room, then, she was surprised to see a corpse of a Spanish woman on her bed. The Spanish woman was stabbed repeatedly. The corpse of the Spanish lady suddenly disappeared. She screamed so loudly. There was one time John took a picture of Jenny; behind Jenny is the stairs. When they looked at the picture, they saw a man whose head is opened and sitting on the stairs. They were really frightened when they saw the picture. One day John heard someone crying and saying ouch. He checked outside who was doing that and he found no one. He was really frightened. One day, the dad is looking at the broken mirror; then, he saw behind him is a woman whose head is bleeding. He turned around and he found no one. When he looked at the mirror again, he did not see the woman, but he saw blood on the mirror. The dad ran outside screaming. One night, the mom heard a baby crying outside her bedroom. She checked it outside and she found no one. She had goose bumps already. One day, Jenny is taking a bath; then she saw a floating head. The head is bleeding. Jenny ran outside screaming. One day John went outside and he took a picture of the house. When he looked at the picture, he saw a Spanish baby falling from the window. He can’t explain how the Spanish baby appeared in the picture. He was really frightened. One day Jenny was in the kitchen; then she felt someone touch her back. She turned around and she found no one. She screamed and ran out of the kitchen. The family heard crying people in their house, or people saying ouch in the middle of the night. When they check, they would find nobody or they would see blood on the floor, they would also see a person whose body is full of blood. They also felt like they were being watched by somebody invisible. They would also feel like they are being followed by something invisible. They would also hear footsteps in the middle of the night. They would also see floating heads, hands, and foot. They see them most of the time in the CR, and most of the time, they came from the toilet. They would sometimes wake up in the middle of the night because someone is shaking, jumping on their bed, or making noises. When they check, they would find no one. They would always see a Spanish man whose heart is bleeding, a woman whose head is bleeding, a man on the stair whose head is opened, a Spanish woman who was stabbed repeatedly, a Spanish baby falling from the window, and people who are severely wounded. They would hear things being moved like doors, tables, chairs, lights turning on and off by themselves, and falling objects. The family decided to ask the people ab
 
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