fearless2work
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...Very Intriguing!!? Alright guys, this is going to be sort of long but stick with me, it will be worth it. I wrote a poem about world ideology, in my view. I want you to answer a few questions, and the person that answers them most precisely, gets the ten points. Sounds easy huh? Sort of. This is going to make you think to an extent, so get ready. I wrote this all from the heart, so please do not think it was plagiarized or anything like that, because it was not. Though it is sort of like a story though! Here are the questions:
1) How would you describe my personality or label. (ex. prep, emo, goth, philosophical, redneck, nerd, and so on.) Feel free to pick any combination or these or your own.
2) How do you relate, and do you agree with me?
3) Guess my age precisely to the year, without looking at my profile.
4) How do you feel about the world?
5) Open to criticism and opinions.
Shall I say, I would like really in depth opinions and responses as well. You do not have to answer the following in that order. That being said, here is the poem. Hope you get something out of it! ( ;
"Everyone has had the feeling, when they were let go from the comfort of their parents, the cold menacing wind of the world upon they're face. It seems as though things like this happen too often though. Is there anything else, any alternative, but to conform to the way of the world? Everyone does it, just unconsciously.
As we wake in the morning, in hope of something more, you were once again thrown to the ground, because there seems to be no room for you anymore.
The years have worn on the hearts of those that shared their love for you, and seems that there is no other choice but to slip away, like we have always done.
Soon, as everyone learns what the world is like, and have stood the cold wind for so long, it does not seem so cold. It is just another part of the uniform motion of the world in which we live in. This is really all it is, isn't it?
I have looked for more, but have found only things that are out of my reach until the day comes of a new era, but who knows when that will be.
We think, 'How could the world be so cruel?' But this is nothing new, just a part of the cycle in which some so foolishly hope more of. Sad thing huh, that the love and joy that we all used to sing about always slips the grip of our society.
How I wish there was more to this. Just something that I could work towards, but does not go away, because everything sort of just perishes under the setting of the sun.
Then comes the dusk, the end of the day, and all that you worked for comes to an end, as we all inevitably know it will.
At that time, some of the people will look back at their life and say, 'Well, I did what I could, and got closer than most others.'
During the same time, the other half shall say, 'When do I reach my goal?'
But even through all of this, there will be one person that will say, 'I overcame conformation, and just let myself go, which is the closest to change that anyone could get.'
In our world today, we always strive for something, something that we hope will make us look better, that will make our parents proud, that will give us security, that will define the great line of who we are.
So you may ask, well how did this one person overcome such a feat, when all the world is is one big cycle? Well, something had to make the cycle, and we all know what it is. Who it is. We just can't reach it yet, until it inspires someone to show us that their still is mystery left in this world, and that their is the odd one out that allows us to follow in their path, conform like we always do.
This is what you would call the Cycle of Life my friends."
Well, I hope you liked it, and please give me all the elaboration that you possibly could, and thank you so much. I have always waited to get some of my feelings out, and I just let myself do it.
I need EVERYONE to try and answer this please. It would be really appreciated. THANK YOU!!!!!
Haha, funny. You can still see how shallow some of these peoples answers are. I can tell you that none of these so far are getting the best answer. (The first two) Well, people, keep on trying.
1) How would you describe my personality or label. (ex. prep, emo, goth, philosophical, redneck, nerd, and so on.) Feel free to pick any combination or these or your own.
2) How do you relate, and do you agree with me?
3) Guess my age precisely to the year, without looking at my profile.
4) How do you feel about the world?
5) Open to criticism and opinions.
Shall I say, I would like really in depth opinions and responses as well. You do not have to answer the following in that order. That being said, here is the poem. Hope you get something out of it! ( ;
"Everyone has had the feeling, when they were let go from the comfort of their parents, the cold menacing wind of the world upon they're face. It seems as though things like this happen too often though. Is there anything else, any alternative, but to conform to the way of the world? Everyone does it, just unconsciously.
As we wake in the morning, in hope of something more, you were once again thrown to the ground, because there seems to be no room for you anymore.
The years have worn on the hearts of those that shared their love for you, and seems that there is no other choice but to slip away, like we have always done.
Soon, as everyone learns what the world is like, and have stood the cold wind for so long, it does not seem so cold. It is just another part of the uniform motion of the world in which we live in. This is really all it is, isn't it?
I have looked for more, but have found only things that are out of my reach until the day comes of a new era, but who knows when that will be.
We think, 'How could the world be so cruel?' But this is nothing new, just a part of the cycle in which some so foolishly hope more of. Sad thing huh, that the love and joy that we all used to sing about always slips the grip of our society.
How I wish there was more to this. Just something that I could work towards, but does not go away, because everything sort of just perishes under the setting of the sun.
Then comes the dusk, the end of the day, and all that you worked for comes to an end, as we all inevitably know it will.
At that time, some of the people will look back at their life and say, 'Well, I did what I could, and got closer than most others.'
During the same time, the other half shall say, 'When do I reach my goal?'
But even through all of this, there will be one person that will say, 'I overcame conformation, and just let myself go, which is the closest to change that anyone could get.'
In our world today, we always strive for something, something that we hope will make us look better, that will make our parents proud, that will give us security, that will define the great line of who we are.
So you may ask, well how did this one person overcome such a feat, when all the world is is one big cycle? Well, something had to make the cycle, and we all know what it is. Who it is. We just can't reach it yet, until it inspires someone to show us that their still is mystery left in this world, and that their is the odd one out that allows us to follow in their path, conform like we always do.
This is what you would call the Cycle of Life my friends."
Well, I hope you liked it, and please give me all the elaboration that you possibly could, and thank you so much. I have always waited to get some of my feelings out, and I just let myself do it.
I need EVERYONE to try and answer this please. It would be really appreciated. THANK YOU!!!!!
Haha, funny. You can still see how shallow some of these peoples answers are. I can tell you that none of these so far are getting the best answer. (The first two) Well, people, keep on trying.