Can you PLEASE help me rephrase this? thanks a lot! ten points to most helpful...

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...answerer! thanks a lot!? hiya! can you please revise the following paragraph by rephrashing it. Please try to change up the content to make it sound more interesting. thanks

“A Doll’s House,” written in 1878 by Henrik Ibsen has been resurrected once more to be translated from stage to film by director Patrick Garland and his vigorous cast. The adaptation proved to be a convincing one. The shining elements of Ibsen’s original script are brought out distinctively, as are each of the character’s attributes. Each scene is managed, by the means of the actors to reveal Ibsen’s inlayed messages and the subtle aspects of the relationships. The movie "A Doll's House" was a success because of its aesthetic presentation, its faithful translation, and its delivery of the message.
 
One only correction. Line 4. Character's is singular possessive case. You need plural -- i.e. each (one of the)
characters' ... The apostrophe comes after the plural 's'.

Your paragraph is very well constructed. It was a pleasure to read, even though I do not know of the story you are involved with. I think I did see 'The Doll's House' a long, long time ago and I have forgotten it. Something to do with prostitution, as I vaguely recall.

I compliment you on the way you introduce topics for subsequent paragraph topics, such as aesthetic presentation, faithful translation and delivery of the message. You even have more higher up in your passage.

Excellent work. Thank you for sharing it with me. You have an accomplished and mature style. You do not need to seek any critique, you obviously are able to do that yourself. But I recognise the perfectionist in you and doffs my cap to you for that, too. Well done. 10/10!
 
No help from me. I strongly suspect you were to read the book and write a short report on it. Instead, you chose a review and will rewrite to hand it in. That or you're too lazy to get moving and do it yourself, if paraphrasing it IS an actual homework assignment.
 
“A Doll’s House,” / written in 1878 by Henrik Ibsen / has been resurrected once more / to be translated / from stage to film by director Patrick Garland / and his vigorous cast.// The adaptation proved / to be a convincing one.// The shining elements / of Ibsen’s original script / are brought out distinctively,/ as are each of the character’s attributes.// Each scene / is managed,/ by the means of the actors / to reveal Ibsen’s inlayed messages / and the subtle aspects of the relationships.// The movie "A Doll's House" / was a success / because of its aesthetic presentation,/ its faithful translation,/ and its delivery of the message.//



Hope I could help you!...Good Luck!
 
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