Can you judge my first poem?

[waterLisLgood]

It's called "Hollow"

Tell me what you think, and tell me what you think I meant... thank you..

Look inside me
What is it you obtained?
A flowerless pot?
You don't know who I am.
I try opening doors to let you in
but they shut when you're close
I'm a beautiful waterfall
I feel
I love
I care
But all you see is a face
And a plastered smile
You're drawn in
And leave me when you realize
When you know
I try to let you know
But it's difficult
The roots of my hair strained
From constant pulling
Teeth ground down to its last
How do I let you in?
Without knowing it won't hurt me?
How do I let you have a glimse?
Without making an impact?
Is this carefree child...
Truly this shut off now?
Denial is my enemy
isolation is my friend
let down is a guarantee
true happiness is lost
You could be my answer
or my suicide note

 

[Poetically Resurrected]

You could be love,,
..or you could be sorrow....
...or you could be nothing..
which would be even more disappointing.
...something is better than nothing..

this is a poem right.!

Good poem right!

Right!

 

[^~*Juicebox*~^]

I love it.
I get a sense of anger and love that this ....guy?....Has no clue that you like him.

For a first time poet,It's good,and lovely.

 

[N O I R]

It seems very personal...I sense angst. Though for a first poem, it's good