This is a poem that I wrote, please tell me what your opinions are about it... any improvements I can make or just any questions or comments you have about this poem. Thanks!
Complete
We have believed this,
Through time once more,
This non horrific sentiment,
Has shaded light upon my individuality,
You see,
I’m a silhouette,
Wild outlines of solid objects,
I am, we all may say,
The project on, our expelling backgrounds,
What about,
A signal blue tinted rose,
A showy gesture, people might posed
Ah save for, this is my ornamental,
Embellishment in writing,
Yet, he was excluded,
Incarcerated, my body physically confined
Or intertwined, by shacks of jagged razors
Oh, how shall he breathe near it?
When all he is, is a nonentity,
Not exact that,
I believed a little conclusion,
On by behalf, be way of life,
My shudder segments, a melodic nasalization,
I know, what I desire,
I know, I am prepared,
You all know,
That I am all…
Complete
We have believed this,
Through time once more,
This non horrific sentiment,
Has shaded light upon my individuality,
You see,
I’m a silhouette,
Wild outlines of solid objects,
I am, we all may say,
The project on, our expelling backgrounds,
What about,
A signal blue tinted rose,
A showy gesture, people might posed
Ah save for, this is my ornamental,
Embellishment in writing,
Yet, he was excluded,
Incarcerated, my body physically confined
Or intertwined, by shacks of jagged razors
Oh, how shall he breathe near it?
When all he is, is a nonentity,
Not exact that,
I believed a little conclusion,
On by behalf, be way of life,
My shudder segments, a melodic nasalization,
I know, what I desire,
I know, I am prepared,
You all know,
That I am all…