Can you help me edit my poem?

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That's the girl in the mirror,
she doesn't speak,
only stares'
lifelessly, soullessly,relentlessly,
she is the other half
going through the motions of the day,
as told
never to fight back,
never to struggle,never to battle
until the day the mirror breaks
crashing,tumbling, down.
she breaks free of the barrier
holding her back
tying her down,
finally liberated
she looks around
....
and realizes
it was all a dream

I need help with my punctuation and I want your sincere comments about it.Thanks.
 
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