Can you critique my latest poem?

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Here Today, Gone Tomorrow
I am here now, and gone tomorrow.
Today I celebrate, tomorrow I shall sorrow;
This "I" is reality today --
Tomorrow, my friends and family will cry in dismay,
For this moment is the now;
To the next moment I must bow.
And I know that tomorrow may never be,
That by then I may have moved on to see:
New worlds, new joys, new friends,
New sorrows, new troubles and new painful ends.
For such is the story of all life --
Filled with joy, and filled with strife,
So I look on yet to the futures of pleasure, and of harrow,
Knowing fully, that I am here now, and gone tomorrow . . . .
 
IT SHOULD HAVE A TITLE BECAUSE A GOOD TITLE ALWAYS MAKES POETRY WORTH RECITATION . A TITLE UNFOLDS THE GIST OF THE POEM.
IT IS A GOOD RHYTHMICAL ATTEMPT REVEALING THE CONTENTS.IT NEEDS MUCH TO IMPROVE.THE IDEAS, WHEN PUT ON A PIECE OF PAPER DO NOT SOUND GREAT AND CREATE GOOD POETRY .
Of course a good poetry comes from lot of practice, but there are some techniques you can incorporate to “add a little zing” to your poetry.

One of the easiest and most effective ones is the use of figures of speech. You can make your poem more interesting, descriptive, more alive and hold the audience interest by the use of these.
 
I like it but think that the rhyming is unnecessary. It kind of ruined it for me and in some places it didn't make sense purely because you tried to make it rhyme. I like the poem and think that it has a good message and like your concept of being there and then not.

Well done
 
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