Can you correct my free verse poem? I'm terrible at poetry?

mamar

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You were not my father, but you fit that mold,
You loaned me your humor and kindness,

If only today you were here,
You could see the joy you’ve spread around us

I know you’re in a better place,
But the place is not with us

You are in our thoughts,
That tears us apart

One day in time,
We will meet again,
And until then,
I miss you

It's a 12 line in length free verse poem
 
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