can u comment on my poem (i didnt say its a masterpiece) im 26,m,uk x?

poetlake

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what am i gonna do today
i will have a think
i am not sure yet
so i will have a shower first
then i will become thirst

so ill make a brew
before puting on my my shoes
and go for a walk
a walk into town
look at some gifts to be
maybe treat myself
its good being me
i love to sight see

so the day is coming to an end
no rules i havent had to bend
as i have loved life
and i cant wait to see my wife.

bed time now
up early tomorrow
hoping its not full of sorrow
im sure it wont be
but who knows, we'll see
 
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