Can someone rate my poem for me please? At least give you're opinion?

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Amanda

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I've always thought of publishing my poems, but I don't know if they're good or not. Here's one:

Can't you hear me?
Can't you hear me?
I'm crying to you,
Lying to you,
Can't you hear me?

Don't you enjoy this?
The fame,
The fame,
The glory.
Don't you enjoy all this?

I can hear you,
I hear your laughter,
Your cries,
It's all in my head,
My mind,
But you still can't hear me.

Can't you hear me?
Can't you see me?
I'm invisible to you,
I'm nothing to you,
Why can't you hear me?

Tralala,
I can't hear you,
Tralala,
I still can't hear you.

Play me a melody,
Sing me a song,
I'm not going to rhyme this,
I'm not waiting for you.

Don't you remember this?
Don't you remember?
What's wrong with you?
Why can't you hear me?

I reach out to you,
I'm reaching as far as I can,
But I'm only getting farther from where I started
 
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