Can someone please read this free verse poem and give me your most honest opinion?

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Nancy Tran

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Dreams

Dreams are harder to achieve than you think.
The path you choose to walk. The path you should've followed.
Hands dragging you down another path.
So painful. Dreams are ripped apart.
Trying hard to put the pieces back together.
Unsucessful, but keep on trying.
For dreams are harder to achieve than you think.


In this poem i was trying to bring out the feeling that you can't be forced to follow a dream that was never yours. i hope i did it sucessfully XD. Please give me your honest opinion.
 
At first i wanted 2 say it shouldve been a different title but then wen u wrote that lil message at the bottom it all made sense so u did awesome
 
Interesting theory. But im sorry it sux. it doesn't get its point across. its all over the place. its just saying random metaphors. ::::::ADVICE TIME::::::: think about peoples life experiences think about what tugs at their heart strings. You'll get it. it just takes some time. find what touches you and use that as ur muse <3 :)
 
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