can someone be honest about my poem tell me is it good?

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As I cry I ask why
As I scream you still continue to give me low self esteem
As you torcher I water
You took a part of me I’ll never get back
But you can’t seem to understand that
You make me feel as though I was wrong
How I WAS THE ONE HARMED
Scared I’ll be for the rest of my life weary, untrusting, always feel like I gotta fight
I will never respect you for playing with my life.
But still I pray that the hurt you caused will fade away
But still I pray no one else has to feel this pain
But I prayed and finally that day has come where god has delivered me from all you’ve done
 
Meh. Using "gotta" makes it seem dumb, and what does "torcher my fire" mean? Torcher is not a word. Other wise, it was fine, but it is a little dragged on.
 
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