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A PHYSICS LESSON
Love is just like gravity,
Careful – Or you’ll fall -
Our emotions are like forces,
Fields acting in a physical world.
We are like particles,
being acted upon with these forces.
And in our lives sleep is inertia,
and death, I’ll talk about it.
Life is rather – complicated to explain,
I believe it is well – another force?
But my friends our paths that we take -
Are all the displacements that Universe.
But if it is so – Then life itself -
Will end in death and sprout again?
I sense one that’s in my class,
not paying attention!
Love is just like gravity,
Even though we’re not particles,
but in real life if we fall to it,
we will surely die.
I give this warning to you -
The most fatal force in life,
so boy, start paying attention,
and stop staring at that girl!
O yes...It needs revising!
Physics experts! (If you like poetry) Give me some physics terms I can use more metaphors and analogies to say what I want to say.
Basically, the physics Professor in this poem senses somebody who isn't paying attention, he sees that the boy in the poem misses out on his class reason of a 'Liebestraume' (lover's dream). Since there is a 'fall in love' metaphor to 'gravity' he starts to analogize. Upon this, he widens his search to things in life - emotions, people, etc., comparing them to physics terms. There is a 'all the world's a stage feeling to it', if you know what I mean...And I didn't convey it well! Then the professor seems to reminisce on his love life (which I didn't convey well either) and goes back to 'love is just like gravity'. Then he comes from his philosophical pondering back to the kid who isn't paying attention, and briefly commands the love-sick boy to pay attention - culminating a physics lesson.
I know that little in significance poem would not require so much interpretation, and rather, I am quite an amateur...
Criticize all you want!
Grammatical errors, problems with verse, etc.
Give me suggestions!
Insult me if you want!
And I'll be sure to revise my poem according to your influence, my dear experts!
Love is just like gravity,
Careful – Or you’ll fall -
Our emotions are like forces,
Fields acting in a physical world.
We are like particles,
being acted upon with these forces.
And in our lives sleep is inertia,
and death, I’ll talk about it.
Life is rather – complicated to explain,
I believe it is well – another force?
But my friends our paths that we take -
Are all the displacements that Universe.
But if it is so – Then life itself -
Will end in death and sprout again?
I sense one that’s in my class,
not paying attention!
Love is just like gravity,
Even though we’re not particles,
but in real life if we fall to it,
we will surely die.
I give this warning to you -
The most fatal force in life,
so boy, start paying attention,
and stop staring at that girl!
O yes...It needs revising!
Physics experts! (If you like poetry) Give me some physics terms I can use more metaphors and analogies to say what I want to say.
Basically, the physics Professor in this poem senses somebody who isn't paying attention, he sees that the boy in the poem misses out on his class reason of a 'Liebestraume' (lover's dream). Since there is a 'fall in love' metaphor to 'gravity' he starts to analogize. Upon this, he widens his search to things in life - emotions, people, etc., comparing them to physics terms. There is a 'all the world's a stage feeling to it', if you know what I mean...And I didn't convey it well! Then the professor seems to reminisce on his love life (which I didn't convey well either) and goes back to 'love is just like gravity'. Then he comes from his philosophical pondering back to the kid who isn't paying attention, and briefly commands the love-sick boy to pay attention - culminating a physics lesson.
I know that little in significance poem would not require so much interpretation, and rather, I am quite an amateur...
Criticize all you want!
Grammatical errors, problems with verse, etc.
Give me suggestions!
Insult me if you want!
And I'll be sure to revise my poem according to your influence, my dear experts!