are there any emcees out there that can give me feedback on my writing?

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it perfectly rides the beat from the way i am when recited in the right way
this is something i knocked up. to be honest its an accumulation of a weeks worth of gettin in the right mood, and writin somethin down. but the overall writing time wasnt long, its not my best, pretty simple, but try and see the flow. i try writing with a nice flow.

if you've got time on your hands, play the youtube video of eminem's 'the way i am' instrumental in the background. peace.



i can hang from a bridge an then land in a ditch

an be standin an inch from your face with a wrench

cos im takin offence to your blatant attempts to be hatefull against me

lyrics aplenty, im emptyin clip after clip of this 5hlT

when it hits you get split from your base to your tip

what a waste of a diss to be takin the Pl55

man im achin to break in ya face with ma fist

you cant stop this assault cos im not gona hault

got a shotgun an colt c0kd an locked in a vault

you get popped in the leg while ya tucked into bed

does this stuff that iv said mean im fukkd in the head

you should trust me its yes cos of drugs in excess

this'd just be a guess but it must be the cess

which has left me with such fukkd up stuff to address

so im stuck with the stress, trust me you'd chuck off one look at this mess



this is what i think of it - some weak content, not my best, threats made in jest, except three, unless you test me, then filth had best arrest me. fun to write. there is a flow. stops pretty suddenly, but it's half written. blah blah seriously im boring myself


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