another poem-does it sound like a pathetic ranting kid?

[i love cookies?]

so, im always worried im one of those teenage girls that gets upset and runs home to write an overly emotional poem about it in a very cliche fashion. so do you think that this is like that, also what do you think of it?

what would you do
were you in my shoes?
would you laugh?
would you cry?
or would you realize what its like to have this happen repetitively
again and again all over to me?


What would you say
if you spent a day
would you get it?
try to edit
the way you act around me every time you taunt and tease
about my biggest insecurities?


Or would you simply shrug it off
brush it off
cause, “hey, at least its not me”
is that who you want to be?
pushing everyone around because there is no direct correlation to you
from the things that you always do?


and finally, one more thing to say
you need to pay
ask for redemption from us
the people youve tossed
aside because we are so insegnificant and small--not worthy
of the friendship of somebody
as great as you?

is that really
really?
the friend you want
and want to be?




critique it but be nice alright? if you say it sucks, ill have to write another sucky poem aboutYOU, got it?

 

[Geminisinger]

...start writing,Ms Rant,but could you please make mine shorter?