Another poem? Does it bring you to ponder?

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By Koye Lott

The child sits
on the floor
in his room
playing.....
He... a tiny king
in a kingdom
of strewn toys...
his most loyal
of subjects
He has power
to build....
tear down....
build.....
tear down....
build.....
much as he
likes....
The child sits
on the floor
in his room
playing....
The child is
you....
The child is
content.....
 
repeating "tear down... build" twice was perfect, a little boy captured.

I wonder if the poem would work better if the lines were longer, less of a jumpy read... just a thought.
 
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