A Silent Friend (Please Comment) might fail?

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judo

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A Silent Friend

A notepad lying infront of me,
No worRAB, just ashes falling from a cigarette,
Burnt down to the filter,
Pondering,
Hell,
I don't even smoke,
The best cure for anything seems to be whisky,
Thinking is not even an option,
Any time I think,
Its like a game of Russian roulette,
These thoughts might set me free,
They might destroy me,
This whisky, nicotine stained blank paper, is all I have to show,
Hours worth of thoughts wasted,
Nothing seems good enough to jot down,
Maybe, just maybe one more shot will do the trick,
To be honest, I really don't care,
F*ck it,

Alcohol numbs your body,
Not the Heart,
Maybe one day,
This pain will go away,
Until then there is always a bottle on my night stand.
 
if you took this part out it would be infinitely better imo. it just seems too pretentious especially with the rugged lines leading up to it. the last stanza says all this in a better way
 
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