a poem... it suckes but i like other peoples opinions. suggestions to make it better?

[-marz!chaoticDiSaStEr!]

I don’t believe in fairytales but feel free to be my superman
Rescue me from my dreams
But most importantly from reality
Don’t leave me here all shattered and confused
Make me better be my hero
Fairytales are so farfetched
But you my dear can be my superman
I don’t believe in fairytales but feel free to be my superman
Rescue me from my reality
But make sure you leave my dreams
Don’t leave me here all shattered and confused
Make me better be my hero
Fairytales are so farfetched
But you my dear can be my superman

i redid it maybe this ways better?

 

[Xavier]

i liked them both but the 2nd one you redid is better

 

[revired]

I think it is great

 

[Bay Raymond]

To me it was ok....