15 year old male who writes poetry decided to write a song?

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hey i write really deep poetry that if you read i ensure your enjoyment
I have realized that poetry can get me only so far and just wrote my first song
tell me if its catchy enough / lyrically in tact to be a song.
Thanks


No adjectives,
can describe the feeling,
Your face is like a mountain
painted over the sun,
WIthin your sunshine
The outside breeze
settles in your hair
Im looking at a painting
Its just to perfect

And i climbed your mountain
and i didn't fall enough
I stopped at your heart
it was darker than i thought

And when you were mine
A beautiful mountain
I realized
I don't like heights

Im leaving the painting
for others to cherish
Maybe you will like her
Maybe your awful

And ill dance in her sunlight
She beams over me
I left her in glory
I left her for me

Dance in the mountain
Dance in the sun
Dance for yourself
Dance your the one

And i climbed your mountain
and i didn't fall enough
i stopped at your heart
it was darker than i thought
yeah its a gangster rap......
 
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