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    please critique my poem?

    Like Water. Weve been trained to feel this way To search for a swank swimming pool Though it’s shallow and cold Drown’s you if you fold You thirst all the same We’re searching for a swimming pool All we want is it’s touch Easy and fast Refreshing and crass For a moment or so, at least. The...
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    What do you think of my poem? 5 stars for most thorough answer?

    Please be completely honest, no sugar coating! This is version 1(basically free handed it) Weve been trained to feel this way Search for a swank swimming pool But it’s shallow and cold Drown’s you if you fold We’re searching for a swimming pool Easy and fast Sickly sweet and crass Just deep...
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    What do you think of my poem? 5 stars for most thorough answer?

    Please be completely honest, no sugar coating! This is version 1(basically free handed it) Weve been trained to feel this way Search for a swank swimming pool But it’s shallow and cold Drown’s you if you fold We’re searching for a swimming pool Easy and fast Sickly sweet and crass Just deep...
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    I just began experiencing a nervous rash and dont know what to make of it?

    I went through a rough first semester of college and now being back i noticed that whenever i feel nervous, intimidated or angry i develop a burning itching rash that covers my neck, chest and scalp. I dont want this to control my life, any advice?
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    Critique of a poem i wrote?

    Regret. Feeling feeble by this guilt The salt gave way to flowers wilt Our cremated coffin i alone built So now remains a stand still silt Please father dont try to flatter To you i should not even matter You've held my heart, prevented shatter But still i still feel need to scatter Could...
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    Critique for a poem i wrote?

    Re: Birth Wrinkled and ashen I shouldn’t feel so old Anxious and lonely You shouldn’t be so cold Even being near you Feels like throwing a pair of dice This wasn’t the plan What happened to my paradise? Because there’s a fire And it rests within my bones A rhythmic spire Reaching up to...
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    Re: Birth opinions on poem]?

    Re: Birth opinions on poem]? Re: Birth Wrinkled and ashen I shouldn’t feel so old Anxious and lonely You shouldn’t be so cold Even being near you Feels like throwing a pair of dice This wasn’t the plan What happened to my paradise? Because there’s a fire And it rests within my bones A...
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    Critique this poem please?

    Pair-apalegic Impaired by your allegiance A wheel chair has become my muse Crippled and deluged This idea that I need you The compassion I feed you Is all for naught Cant escape the thought That I need you I bleed you. But these legs are still my own These legs may walk alone But remember that...
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