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    New poem. Advice please, and opinions?

    Idk if it's really a poem, just how I'm feeling I open up* You leave I give you my trust You push it around I believe When I shouldn't I try to help* And do right Only to be pushed around And you still Can't see that I'm slowly dying inside With a knife on my chest, and a black broken heart...
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    A new poem I just wrote, will u c/c it for me please?

    Take me away To a much safer land* Where we can shore* And be free for once and for all Take me high High above the clouds Where I can be me With no Hurt or pain Then you'll let me go Lowering your wings That kept me above,* Above death Letting me fall* Letting me crash For you no longer...
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    A new poem I just wrote, will u c/c it for me please?

    Take me away To a much safer land* Where we can shore* And be free for once and for all Take me high High above the clouds Where I can be me With no Hurt or pain Then you'll let me go Lowering your wings That kept me above,* Above death Letting me fall* Letting me crash For you no longer...
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    Poetry question... Please help?

    What should my next poem be about?
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    Depressing poem? Read it? Feedback? ?

    Every morning she wakes up Tired from the night before* From crying herself alseep* But she has bigger problems the next day She wonder how she is going to hide all her injurys* The black and blue spots on her body Hoping for no one too see *she walks to school every day Wearing the same...
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    New poem. Opinions please. ?

    She suffers by herself For no one understands, Her pain in her heart It's once again* Becoming to much She questions alot Mostly about going back Going back to the* Harsh cold metal She used, To pry her pail paper thin skin open She tells herself not too go back But it's over...
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    Help me finish this poem?

    Hope your happy You destroyed me* Their is no point for my heart to still have a beat You feed me lies And I took them Believed them* I don't know how I could have been so blind Im just a limb falling of the face of the earth.*
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    Opinion on this Poem I wrote?

    *My gardain angel:** I once had a dream Where everything was peaceful In the most beautiful magetic feild Grass so soft I could have slept their for ever* A place where their was no need to worry No such thing of a broken heart But that dream took a turn to a nightmare* Where I was stuck in...
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    Poem I just wrote. Called cliff diving. Give Feedback please? ?

    Cliff diving The water was not calm Nor was it roaring It had a strong tide Strong enough to send you swirling We didn't care As we stood on the edge of a 50ft cliff Watching the water smack into the buldging rocks We aim to jump far With one last look* We took each others hands Shut our eyes*...
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    Poem I wrote: coldness of a buzzard, opinions?

    *The coldness of a buzzard:* The rivers are deep The oceans are deeper Both cold But the world is colder Bringing everyone down Claiming new victims Day by day Suffocating us all* Smothering with what we have left Soon it will all go down As we watch are walls go up Unfamiliar with your...
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